Final Post :)

Original Post:                                                                                                                 Destiny Miller

 

So far I am on page 38 (I think) and I have found out that Pressia is helping people with medical disabilities. Like she had helped this little boy with making a fake arm. She is being very helpful in the community and tries the best she can to keep everyone safe and healthy, even with her disability. Then in a whole different setting, Partridge (Pressia's half-brother), is being kept safe by the Mothers. They are keeping him in a seller and he has been give a pencil, paper, and a piece of wood to make maps for the Mothers.

Partridge's, Mother's Vials

Then Partridge lifts up a jar from off of an old shelf and beetles scatter and he pulls out 4 vials from underneath the jar. His mother had said, before she died, they can be very dangerous but yet life saving. So Partridge takes one of the beetles that was found underneath the jar, and cups it in his hand. Partridge wants to experiment on the beetle to see what would happen to it.

So he tries to put the needle of the vial into the beetle and the beetle sticks him/ stabs him with the spikes on his legs. And Partridge then lets go of it but not before a tiny drop drops onto the beetle. And then after like 10 minutes Partridge sees the beetle trying to get away but it has a huge over grow leg. He sees it try to fly but it can't because of the legs weight, it digs a hole and buries itself.

Works cited: http://southtampaimmediatecare.com/flu-shots-tampa.html

Questions:

1. What specific words/phrases demonstrate your writer's voice? How do these words/phrases showcase your personality as a writer?

At the beginning of this post I put what page I was on and then if I was unsure, I would put "(I think)." I also had used the word "so" a lot. How they showcase my personality as a writer is by allowing me to say something and be unsure about it and it would be ok. Why I think this is ok is because I had told my viewers that I was unsure and they would except it. Also for the word "so," it allows the people viewing my page to get what I'm saying without using a bigger vocabulary and it makes it simple. :)

2. What purposeful diction and syntax choices did you make to enhance your writer's voice?

What I have done to enhance my writers voice is I used Low/informal diction so it makes my posts and voice sound simple. Just like when I said, "So far I am on page 38..." But at the same time very descriptive. Also I had used what we call a "Punctuation Trademark." And in my syntax, I had used a lot of comas. Also a lot of periods too. Also, just like I said, "His mother had said, before she died, they can be very dangerous but yet life saving."